Competition in this pair is now closed, and the winning entry has been announced. Discussion and feedback about the competition in this language pair may now be provided by visiting the "Discussion & feedback" page for this pair. Entries may also be individually discussed by clicking the "Discuss" link next to any listed entry. Source text in Russian Солнце было в зените. Медный от пыли диск висел в центре белесого, нечистого неба, ублюдочная тень корчилась и топорщилась под самыми подошвами, то серая и размытая, то вдруг словно оживающая, обретающая резкость очертаний, наливающаяся чернотой и тогда особенно уродливая. Никакой дороги здесь и в помине не было -- была бугристая серо-желтая сухая глина, растрескавшаяся, убитая, твердая, как камень, и до того голая, что совершенно не понятно было, откуда здесь берется такая масса пыли.
Ветер, слава богу, дул в спину. Где-то далеко позади он засасывал в себя неисчислимые тонны гнусной раскаленной пороши и с тупым упорством волочил ее вдоль выжженного солнцем выступа, зажатого между пропастью и Желтой стеной, то выбрасывая ее крутящимся протуберанцем до самого неба, то скручивая туго в гибкие, почти кокетливые, лебединые шеи смерчей, то просто катил клубящимся валом, а потом, вдруг остервенев, швырял колючую муку в спины, в волосы, хлестал, зверея, по мокрому от пота затылку, стегал по рукам, по ушам, набивал карманы, сыпал за шиворот…
Ничего здесь не было, давно уже ничего не было. А может быть, и никогда. Солнце, глина, ветер. Только иногда пронесется, крутясь и подпрыгивая кривляющимся скоморохом, колючий скелет куста, выдранного с корнем бог знает где позади. Ни капли воды, никаких признаков жизни. И только пыль, пыль, пыль, пыль…
Время от времени глина под ногами куда-то пропадала, и начиналось сплошное каменное крошево. Здесь все было раскалено, как в аду. То справа, то слева начинали выглядывать из клубов несущейся пыли гигантские обломки скал – седые, словно мукой припорошенные. Ветер и жара придавали им самые странные и неожиданные очертания, и было страшно, что они вот так – то появляются, то вновь исчезают, как призраки, словно играют в свои каменные прятки. А щебень под ногами становился все крупнее, и вдруг россыпь кончалась, и снова под ногами звенела глина. | The winning entry has been announced in this pair.There were 21 entries submitted in this pair during the submission phase, 7 of which were selected by peers to advance to the finals round. The winning entry was determined based on finals round voting by peers.
Competition in this pair is now closed. | The sun was at its zenith. The disc, brazen with dust, hung in the middle of a chalky, foul sky, and a mongrel shadow was squirming and puckering right under the soles of our feet. At times it was dull and blurry but suddenly seemed to come alive, acquiring a sharper outline and being filled with blackness, which made it look especially ugly. There was no road to speak of, only bumpy dry gray and yellow clay, which was chapped, dead, hard as a rock and so bare that it was entirely unclear where such a great mass of dust was coming from. Thank god the wind was blowing from behind. Somewhere further back it sucked in countless tonnes of vile scorching powder and with blunt tenacity dragged it along a sun-burnt rocky ledge, which was sandwiched between the steep and the Yellow Wall. It was either throwing it like a spinning protuberance as high as the sky or twisting into flexible, almost flirtatious swan-like necks of whirlwinds, sometimes merely rolling and curling, and then, suddenly going mad, hurling prickly dust into our backs and hair, splashing, like a beast, on the back of the head drenched in sweat, lashing against our arms and ears, filling pockets, pouring inside collars... There was nothing here, for a long time - nothing. Maybe there has never been anything. The sun, the clay, the wind. Only occasionally a prickly skeleton of a bush, ripped out and uprooted god knows how far behind, would shoot past, twisting and jumping like a grimacing clown. Not a drop of water, not a single sign of life. Only dust, and dust, and dust... From time to time the clay underfoot would disappear and a stretch of stone chips would begin. Everything here was as red-hot as hell. To the right and to the left giant rock fragments, grey and powdery as if covered in flour, would peer from within the swarms of dust flying past. The wind and the heat made their silhouettes look somewhat strange and unexpected. Frightfully, they appeared and disappeared like ghosts playing their own stone version of hide-and-seek. Eventually cobble underfoot would grow larger and larger, the stone spreading would come to an abrupt end and clay would squelch underfoot again. | Entry #18061 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Not specifiednone
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Entry | 3.50 | 3.31 (13 ratings) | 3.69 (13 ratings) |
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mongrel shadow | Flows well | JuliaC No agrees/disagrees | |
r feet. At times it | Other good syntax | Artem Nedrya No agrees/disagrees | |
+2 1 Only occasionally a prickly skeleton of a bush, ripped out and uprooted god knows how far behind, would shoot past, twisting and jumping like a grimacing clown. | Flows well | Natalia Nikitin | |
the right and to the left giant rock fragments, grey and powdery as if covered in flour, would peer from within the swarms of dust flying past. | Flows well | Veera Aleksandridis No agrees/disagrees | |
+2 like ghosts playing their own stone version of hide-and-seek | Flows well | Nadezhda Golubeva | |
- 4 users entered 6 "dislike" tags
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+3 1 the steep | Mistranslations abyss, chasm, precipice - many other better options for 'пропасть' | Natalia Nikitin | |
our | Inconsistencies | olga vlad No agrees/disagrees | |
our | Inconsistencies | olga vlad No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was at its highest point. Bronzed by the dust, its disk hung in the centre of an off-white, unclean sky, and its half-hearted shadow contorted and bristled under the soles of his shoes, sometimes grey and faded, and sometimes suddenly animated, becoming sharply defined, flooded with black, and particularly hideous. There was no sign of any road here – only uneven, greyish-yellow, dry clay which was cracked, compacted, as hard as stone, and so bare that it was impossible to understand where such a mass of dust had come from. The wind, thank God, was blowing onto his back. Somewhere, far behind in the distance, it had sucked up countless tonnes of vile, scorching-hot powder and had dragged it with stubborn obstinacy along the sunburnt ledge which nestled between the chasm and the Yellow Wall. At times its swirling gusts tossed the dust up to the very sky, and at other times it wound it up tightly to form a flexible, almost coquettish, cyclonic swan’s neck, or it might even simply churn like a billowing wave, then all at once become whipped up into a frenzy and hurl the prickly flour onto his back and hair, brutally pelting the back of his sweat-drenched neck, lashing his hands and ears, filling his pockets and pouring into his collar… There was nothing here. There had been nothing here for a long time. Perhaps forever. Just sun, clay and wind. Occasionally a prickly skeleton of a bush, torn out of the ground in some far-off place, would pass by, twirling and leaping like a crazed jester. There was not a drop of water and no sign of life. Only dust, dust, and more dust… From time to time the clay underfoot gave way, causing a considerable landslide. Everything here was as hot as hell. To right and to left, gigantic cliff faces – grey, as if sprinkled with flour – gave them the strangest and most unexpected appearance, and then disappeared, like ghosts, seemingly playing some kind of stony hide and seek. Meanwhile, the gravel under his feet became ever firmer, the loose shingle was gone in an instant, and his footsteps rang out once again on the clay. | Entry #22201 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Britishbritish
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Entry | 3.13 | 3.25 (12 ratings) | 3.00 (11 ratings) |
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half-hearted | Flows well Not a 'direct' translation, but highly suitable for the overall feel in English. | Natalia Nikitin No agrees/disagrees | |
cracked, compacted, as hard as stone | Flows well Concise and accurate | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
and so bare that it was impossible to understand where such a mass of dust had come from | Flows well | Natalia Nikitin No agrees/disagrees | |
At times its swirling gusts tossed the dust up to the very sky, and at other times it wound it up tightly to form a flexible, almost coquettish, cyclonic swan’s neck, | Flows well well said | Elizabeth Kulikov No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 brutally pelting the back of his sweat-drenched neck, | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin | |
- 8 users entered 18 "dislike" tags
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| Mistranslations different meaning from the original word | Artem Nedrya | |
his | Mistranslations Where does the original text says if the backs were "our" or "your" or "my" or "her"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
| Mistranslations The connotation here is dead wrong. | Ligia Costa | |
might | Inconsistencies Switched tense in the middle of a sentence. | Ligia Costa No agrees/disagrees | |
his back and hair, brutally pelting the back of his sweat-drenched neck, lashing his hands and ears, filling his pockets and pouring into his collar | Mistranslations Why "his"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
+4 2 gave way, causing a considerable landslide. | Mistranslations | Cristina Palmer | |
gave | Grammar errors you need something to link this to the rest of the sentence. What gave what? | Ligia Costa No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was directly overhead. A disk, tinged a coppery shade by the dust in the air, it hung in the center of the off-white, unclean sky. A peculiar shadow writhed and bristled under their shoes, at times grey and washed out, at others suddenly coming to life, acquiring sharp contours, and becoming saturated with blackness, which gave it an especially bizarre look. There was no road here at all, nor was there even a trace of one. All around, there was uneven grayish-yellow, dry clay, cracked, crushed, hard as rock, and so denuded that it was completely impossible to tell where the mass of dust around them had come from. The wind, thank God, was at their backs. Somewhere, far away, it had sucked up innumerable tons of vile, scorching hot particles and with dogged persistence had swept them along the sun-burnt ledge, squeezed between the chasm and the Yellow Wall. Sometimes it cast its whirling protuberances into the heavens themselves, and at other times it curled tightly in flexible, almost coquettish swan's neck whirlwinds. It flung its prickly suffering into their backs and hair, lashing them, brutalizing their sweat-soaked napes. It whipped their hands and ears, filling their pockets, pouring into their collars... There was nothing here. There hadn't been anything here for a long time, and maybe there had never been. Just sun, clay and wind. Sometimes the thorny skeleton of a bush would pass by, spinning and leaping like a wriggling acrobat, having been ripped from roots that had grown God knows where. There wasn't a drop of water, no sign of life. Just dust, dust, dust, and more dust... From time to time, the clay under their feet would give way to a compact gravel. Everything was burning hot here, like in hell. First from the right, then from the left, gigantic fragments of rock, ash-gray as if sprinkled with flour, would peek out of the dust clouds. The wind and heat had lent them the strangest and most unexpected shapes, and it was eerie how they would materialize fleetingly only to fade away once again like ghosts, as if playing hide and seek, in their way. Then the pebbles under their feet would become larger and larger, and suddenly the gravel would come to an end, and their feet would begin clomping on clay again. | Entry #22216 — Discuss 0 — Variant: USuseng
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Entry | 3.20 | 3.20 (10 ratings) | 3.20 (10 ratings) |
- 3 users entered 14 "like" tags
- 5 users agreed with "likes" (9 total agrees)
- 1 user disagreed with "likes" (1 total disagree)
+1 A peculiar shadow writhed and bristled under their shoes, at times grey and washed out, at others suddenly coming to life, acquiring sharp contours, | Flows well | K2tona | |
and becoming saturated with blackness, | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 +3 1 There was no road here at all, nor was there even a trace of one | Flows well | K2tona | |
denuded | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
that it was completely impossible to tell where the mass of dust around them had come from | Flows well | Veera Aleksandridis No agrees/disagrees | |
of dust around them had come from | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
at their backs | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 istence had swept them along the sun-burnt ledge, squeezed between the ch | Flows well | TanyaKalitina | |
It flung its prickly suffering into their backs and hair, lashing them, brutalizing their sweat-soaked napes. It whipped their hands and ears, filling their pockets, pouring into their collars... | Flows well | Veera Aleksandridis No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 1 give way to a compact gravel. | Flows well | K2tona | |
+1 1 gigantic fragments of rock, ash-gray as if sprinkled with flour, would peek out of the dust clouds. | Flows well | K2tona | |
The wind and heat had lent them the strangest and most unexpected shapes, and it was eerie how they would materialize fleetingly only to fade away once again like ghosts, as if playing hide and seek | Flows well | Veera Aleksandridis No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 1 it was eerie how they would materialize fleetingly only to fade away once again like ghosts, as if playing hide and seek | Flows well | K2tona | |
+1 begin clomping on clay again | Flows well | K2tona | |
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- 5 users agreed with "dislikes" (11 total agrees)
- 6 users disagreed with "dislikes" (12 total disagrees)
-3 +1 3 A disk | Grammar errors 'the' article is needed | K2tona | |
it | Grammar errors no pronoun is necessary | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
+2 1 peculiar | Other Not entirely incorrect, be veers away form the Russian a bit too far. | Natalia Nikitin | |
their | Other Too specific, the reader isn't supposed to know anything about the character(s) yet. | Valentina Kozyreva No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 +1 1 their | Mistranslations Where does the original text says if the backs were "our" or "your" or "my" or "her" or "their"? | kideko | |
-2 +1 1 swan's | Grammar errors no apostrophe is needed | K2tona | |
their | Mistranslations The original text does not say "their" | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
-4 2 Just sun, | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
| Grammar errors either 'from its roots' or 'at the root', 'from roots' doesn't sound right. | Natalia Nikitin | |
roots | Grammar errors the roots | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 +1 1 that had grown God knows where. | Syntax it looks like the roots grew separately | K2tona | |
| The sun was at its zenith. Its disc, coloured copper by the dust, hung in the middle of a pale, polluted sky and the skulking shadow writhed and bulged right under the soles of one’s feet. Grey and indistinct, the shadow could suddenly come to life, gaining sharp outlines, swelling with darkness and becoming particularly ugly. There was no road here to speak of – only bumpy greyish-yellow dry clay, cracked, stone-dead and hard, so bare that it was difficult to imagine where all this dust came from. Thankfully the wind was blowing from behind. Somewhere far back it had sucked up countless tons of the detestable burning hot dust particles and with blind stubbornness dragged them along the sun-scorched ledge, wedged between the precipice and the Yellow Wall. At other times it flung them in a spinning funnel right up into the sky or, twisted them tightly into lithe, almost playful, swan-necked whirlwinds or simply drove them forward in rolling billows and then, in a sudden fit of rage, threw down its prickly powder onto people’s backs and hair, lashing out like a beast at the sweat on the back of one’s neck, whipping arms and ears, filling pockets and getting inside collars... There was nothing here and there hasn’t been for a long time. Perhaps never. Sun, clay and wind. Only rarely the thorny skeleton of a shrub would tumble by, spinning and jumping like a contorting jester, having been uprooted at some godforsaken point far behind. Not a drop of water, no sign of life. Only dust, dust and more dust... From time to time the clay underfoot vanished and was replaced by a continuous broken stone. Everything here was scorching, like in hell. Sometimes to the right or to the left giant broken cliffs, greying as if dusted by flour, started to appear from among the speeding plumes of dust. The wind and the heat gave them the strangest and most unexpected shapes and their sudden ghostly apparitions and vanishings were frightening to watch, as they seemed to play a stony game of hide-and-seek. And the stone debris on the ground became larger and larger and then the gravel patch ended suddenly and once again clay would be ringing underfoot. | Entry #22195 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Britishbritish
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Entry | 3.15 | 2.90 (10 ratings) | 3.40 (10 ratings) |
- 4 users entered 7 "like" tags
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coloured copper | Flows well | Anna Shaughnessy (X) No agrees/disagrees | |
one’s | Good term selection | Anna Shaughnessy (X) No agrees/disagrees | |
Grey and indistinct, the shadow could suddenly come to life | Flows well sounds idiomatic | Artem Nedrya No agrees/disagrees | |
once again clay would be ringing underfoot. | Other Overall excellent translation | Anna Shaughnessy (X) No agrees/disagrees | |
- 5 users entered 18 "dislike" tags
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- 3 users disagreed with "dislikes" (22 total disagrees)
-2 +1 1 coloured copper by the dust | Spelling i don't understand the construction | katerina turevich | |
-2 1 stone-dead and hard | Spelling redundancy | K2tona | |
-1 1 sucked up | Other too literal; ugly construction in relation to wind | katerina turevich | |
-1 1 detestable | Spelling detestable implies personal attitude. there are lots of other adjectives that would fit | katerina turevich | |
-1 1 them | Syntax whom 'them ' then? give it a name, or at least an 'it' | katerina turevich | |
-1 1 here and there hasn’t been for | Omission the word 'that 'is ommitted, 'here and there that hasn't" | katerina turevich | |
-1 1 vanishings | Other although grammatically correct, word as such is not ever used | katerina turevich | |
| The sun was at the zenith. The great orb, copper from dust, hung in the centre of a pale, dirty sky. The bastardly shade writhed and bristled under the very soles of our feet, sometimes appearing grey and washed out, but sometimes it was as if it suddenly came to life, taking on a sharpness of contours, filling itself up with blackness, at which moment it was particularly unsightly. There was no trace of any kind of a road here—just dry, uneven clay of a yellow-grey hue. The clay was cracked, dead, hard as a rock, and bare to such an extent that it was quite incomprehensible where such a massive amount of dust was coming from. The wind, thank God, was at our backs. Somewhere far away behind us, it sucked up innumerable tonnes of wretched, scorching powder, and, with bullheaded persistence, dragged it along a sun-scorched buttress wedged between an abyss and the Yellow Wall, first throwing it up in a spinning protuberance to the very sky, then tightly twisting it into flexible, almost coquettish swans’ necks of dust whirls, and then simply rolling it in a huge, billowing wave; suddenly, it furiously hurled the itchy flour at our backs, in our hair, and, flying into a rage, whipped it at the back of our heads, wet from sweat, lashed it at our arms and ears, filled our pockets, and rained it down behind our collars... There was nothing here, nor had there been anything for quite some time. But perhaps...there never was. Sun, clay, wind. Sometimes though, the thorny skeleton of a bush, ripped out at the root from God knows where, will shoot past, whirling and leaping, making a scene like a wandering minstrel-clown from a bygone era. Not a single drop of water, no signs of any kind of life whatsoever. Only dust, dust, endless dust... From time to time, the clay under our feet disappeared and was replaced by a continuous mass of strewn rock debris. Everything here was red-hot, as in hell itself. First on the right and then on the left, giant pieces of rock—ash grey, as if powdered with flour—began to emerge from clouds of dust rushing past. The wind and heat had made their mark on them, carving them up into the most strange and unlikely forms. It was terrifying how they would sometimes appear and then suddenly disappear just like that—as if they were ghosts playing hide-and-seek. But then the scattered rock debris below us grew larger and larger and quite suddenly the flow of rocks terminated and the sound of clay once again rang out from under our boots. | Entry #21386 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Not specifiednone
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Entry | 3.37 | 3.36 (14 ratings) | 3.38 (13 ratings) |
- 4 users entered 10 "like" tags
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The bastardly shade writhed and bristled | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 1 was quite incomprehensible where such a massive amount of dust was coming from | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin | |
+2 with bullheaded persistence, dragged it along a sun-scorched buttress wedged between an abyss and | Flows well nice | Elizabeth Kulikov | |
+1 nor had there been anything for quite some time. | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin | |
the thorny skeleton of a bush, ripped out at the root from God knows where | Flows well Good choice of words. | Veera Aleksandridis No agrees/disagrees | |
Only dust, dust, endless dust | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 the sound of clay once again rang out from under our boots. | Flows well | Natalia Nikitin | |
- 6 users entered 13 "dislike" tags
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it was as if it | Other cumbersome | Artem Nedrya No agrees/disagrees | |
| Mistranslations Where does the original text says if the backs were "our" or "your" or "my" or "her"? | kideko | |
-4 +2 3 swans’ | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
-1 +1 1 and then | Mistranslations Implied sequential meaning not there in Russian. | Natalia Nikitin | |
-2 1 Sun, clay, wind | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
| Inconsistencies there was not a word about the bygone era | K2tona | |
+1 made their mark on them, carving them up | Mistranslations They weren't physically altered, they just looked as such. | Sofia Gutkin | |
-1 1 flow of rocks | Inconsistencies Sounds like an avalanche. | Sofia Gutkin | |
| The sun was at its peak, its dusty copper disc hanging amid the murky discoloured sky, a diffuse shadow squirming and swelling beneath our very soles, alternating between grey amorphousness and manifesting as a loathsome sharp outlined dark mass. No road had ever crossed these parts as long as anyone remembered: they had ever been covered in lumpy greyish yellow clay, cracked, lifeless, stone-hard, and so barren as to beg the question where so much dust could have originated. Thank God, the wind rose from our rear. Somewhere far behind us, it drew countless tonnes of appallingly hot powder, dragging it with a mindless tenacity across the sunbaked ridge between the precipice and the Yellow Wall, chucking it up in swirling protuberances high into the sky, stretching it into sinuous, almost pretty swan’s neck tornadoes, or simply rolling it around in billowing swirls before, taken by sudden fury, hurling its prickly flour onto our backs and hair, lashing our sweat-drenched necks, whipping our arms and ears, packing it into our pockets and under our collars… There was nothing around; there had long been nothing around. Perhaps there had never been anything around. Except sun, clay, and wind. Only occasionally, the prickly skeleton of a bush uprooted God knows how far away would fly past, spinning and hopping like a malevolent jester. Not a drop of water, not a sign of life. Just dust, dust, dust, dust… From time to time, the clay underfoot would disappear, giving way to a solid stone gulch, hot as Hell itself. To right and left, the dust clouds would reveal giant fragments of rock, matted grey as if dusted with flour. Wind and heat had moulded them in the weirdest of alarming shapes that would flash and disappear scarily, like stone ghosts playing a petrified game of hide-and-seek. The gravel underfoot would then grow larger before the gulch would suddenly give way to new expanses of ringing clay. | Entry #18152 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Not specifiednone
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Entry | 3.12 | 3.08 (13 ratings) | 3.15 (13 ratings) |
- 3 users entered 6 "like" tags
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diffuse shadow squirming and swelling | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 dragging it with a mindless tenacity across the sunbaked ridge | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin | |
simply rolling it around in billowing swirls before, taken by sudden fury, hurling its prickly flour onto | Flows well | Veera Aleksandridis No agrees/disagrees | |
the dust clouds would reveal giant fragments of rock | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 give way to new expanses of ringing clay. | Flows well | K2tona | |
- 5 users entered 7 "dislike" tags
- 10 users agreed with "dislikes" (13 total agrees)
- 4 users disagreed with "dislikes" (4 total disagrees)
+1 a diffuse shadow squirming and swelling beneath our very soles, alternating between grey amorphousness | Syntax too long sentence, hard to read | Artem Nedrya | |
+6 1 Thank God, the wind rose from our rear. | Syntax Sorry, but you can't say that. You just can't. Think about it. What wind comes from someone's rear? | Elizabeth Kulikov | |
the wind rose from our rear | Other oh god, this is so wrong | Sofia Chesney No agrees/disagrees | |
pretty | Mistranslations strays too far from original | Elizabeth Kulikov No agrees/disagrees | |
-2 +1 2 swan’s neck | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
-2 +1 2 Perhaps there had never been anything around. | Other A bit too much repetition. | Sofia Gutkin | |
| The sun was at its zenith. Its copper-coloured disk hung in the middle of the hazy sky. A revolting shadow twisted and puckered underfoot, one moment grey and indistinct, then, as if suddenly reviving, more pronounced, darker and therefore particularly ugly. There had been no trace of a road, only a lumpy greyish-yellow dried clay surface; cracked, lifeless, stone hard and so bare that it was not clear where such a mass of dust could be coming from. The wind, thank God, was blowing from behind. Somewhere far behind, it would suck up untold masses of hideous hot dust, dragging it with utter stubbornness along the sunburnt prominence squeezed between the precipice and the Yellow Wall. Then it would either hurl the dust up toward the sky in spinning extensions or would twist it into slender, almost fetching whirlwinds, which resembled swan necks, or simply roll it into a cloudy mass, and then, as if suddenly infuriated, throw the prickly dust into one’s back and hair or slash ferociously at the nape of one’s sweaty neck, at the hands and ears, would stuff pockets and trickle behind one’s collar… There has been nothing here, nothing at all for a long time, perhaps, even never, ever before but the sun, clay and wind. Sometimes a thorny skeleton of an uprooted bush from God knows where behind, rushed past twirling and bouncing like a twisting clown. There was neither a drop of water nor evidence of life but only dust, dust, dust and more dust… From time to time, the clay underfoot would vanish, to be replaced with an expanse of rocky gravel. Here, everything was as scorching hot as hell. To the right or the left, huge pieces of fallen rock would suddenly emerge from billowing clouds of dust, grey as if sprinkled with powder. The wind and the heat give them the most strange and unusual silhouettes, eerily, emerging then vanishing again like ghosts playing a rocky “hide and seek”. The gravel underfoot grew in size until suddenly it ended, again replaced by clay resonating beneath my feet. | Entry #22222 — Discuss 0 — Variant: UKukeng
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+2 Its copper-coloured disk hung in the middle of the hazy sky | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin | |
hazy sky. A revolting | Other good clear constraction | Artem Nedrya No agrees/disagrees | |
+2 one moment grey and indistinct, then, as if suddenly reviving, more pronounced, darker and therefore particularly ugly | Flows well | Nadezhda Golubeva | |
+5 There had been no trace of a road, only a lumpy greyish-yellow dried clay surface; cracked, lifeless, stone hard and so bare that it was not clear where such a mass of dust could be coming from | Flows well | Nadezhda Golubeva | |
+1 The wind, thank God, was blowing from behind | Flows well | sea-n-shells | |
Somewhere far behind, it would suck up untold masses of hideous hot dust, dragging it with utter stubbornness along the sunburnt prominence squeezed between the precipice and the Yellow Wall. | Flows well | Veera Aleksandridis No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 the clay underfoot would vanish, to be replaced with an expanse of rocky gravel | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin | |
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-3 +1 3 revolting | Mistranslations The Russian says ублюдочная тень - bastardly or bastard shade, not revolting | Sarah McDowell | |
| Grammar errors past simple in two previous sentences | Artem Nedrya | |
it would either | Mistranslations | Ligia Costa No agrees/disagrees | |
| Other This is a 3rd person narrative, with a non-present narrator. | Ligia Costa | |
+2 even never, ever before | Grammar errors Awkward joining of two sentences | Sofia Gutkin | |
| Non-finalist entries The following entries were not selected by peers to advance to finals-round voting. The sun was directly overhead. The dusty copper disc floated in the centre of a dirty faded sky, while their deformed shadows twisted and bulged underfoot, at times grey and blurred, and at times suddenly coming alive, becoming crisp and deeply black, and hence especially ugly. There was no path here and never had been. There was only the dry, lumpy, yellow-grey mud, cracked, rock hard, and so bare, that it made no sense for there to be so much dust around. The wind was thankfully blowing from behind. Somewhere far, far back it sucked up endless tonnes of filthy, scorching grit and stubbornly dragged it along the torrid ledge, trapped between the abyss and the Yellow Wall. The wind threw it high up into the sky as a spinning tornado, then twisted it into flexible, like coy swan necks, whirlwinds, or simply rolled it forward as a swirling wall, and then, as if suddenly enraged, threw the pebbled powder against their backs and hair, whipping the dust against their sweat-soaked heads, lashing their arms and ears, and pouring it into their pockets and down the back of their clothing. There was nothing here and had not been for a very long time. Perhaps it had always been like this. Just the sun, the mud and the wind. Once in a while, a skeletal ball of shrubbery, torn out from God knows how far behind them, would shoot past, spinning and bouncing along its zigzag route. There was not a drop of water and no sign of life. Only the dust, and more dust... From time to time, the mud would disappear, and they would walk over a rocky scree. Everything around them was hellishly hot. On either side, giant stone outcrops would intermittently peak out from the roiling dust, grey, as if powdered with flour. The heat and the wind gave them strange and unexpected shapes, and it was frightening to watch them appear and disappear, like phantoms, playing a game of hide-and-seek. The stones underfoot would get larger and larger, and then the scree would suddenly end, and they would again be walking over the echoing mud. | Entry #20329 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Britishbritish
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floated in the centre of a dirty faded sky | Flows well | Natalia Nikitin No agrees/disagrees | |
becoming crisp and deeply black, | Flows well | Natalia Nikitin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 Everything around them was hellishly hot. | Flows well Like it. | Natalia Nikitin | |
+2 it was frightening to watch them appear and disappear, like phantoms, playing a game of hide-and-seek. | Flows well nice job | Elizabeth Kulikov | |
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The dusty copper disc floated in the centre of a dirty faded sky, | Other bad flow of “dusty copper disc” & “dirty faded sky” next to each other - almost as in a bad poem | movcharov No agrees/disagrees | |
-2 +2 1 their | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
+2 1 it into flexible, like coy swan necks, whirlwinds | Other The opposite of 'Flows well'. | Natalia Nikitin | |
| It was high noon. The sun, a disk turned copper by the dust, hung in the centre of the pale, dirty sky; the adulterated shade danced and undulated right under the soles of my feet, one minute grey and blurred, then suddenly almost coming to life, the contours achieving definition, filling the blackness and then positively monstrous. There were no paths here, not even a trace of one – it was a bumpy, dry, greyish-yellow clay, cracked, dead, hard, like rock, and so far bare, and in no way did it explain how there had come to be such an enormous amount of dust. The wind, thank goodness, was at my back. Somewhere, a long way back, it had sucked in tonnes beyond number of invidious, white-hot dust and, with blunt perseverance, it dragged it along the sun-scorched ledge squeezed in between the precipice and the Yellow Wall, shooting it up into the sky in a whirling peak, then curling tightly into supple, almost flirtatious tornados like swans’ necks, before simply rolling in a billowing wave; then, in a sudden fury, it drove needles of pain into my back, my hair; brutal, it lashed the back of my neck, damp with sweat; it whipped my arms, my ears, it filled my pockets, it grabbed me by the scruff of my neck... There was nothing here, there hadn’t been for a long time. Perhaps there never had been. The sun, the earth, the wind. Only now and then the spiky skeleton of a shrub would streak past, ripped out by the root way back God knows where, twirling and jumping like a japing jester. Not a drop of water, no signs of life. Just dust, dust, dust, dust… From time to time the earth under my feet petered out, giving way to solid shards of rock. Here, everything was red-hot, like hell. To the right and to the left, gigantic splinters of rock were starting to peek out through the clouds of galloping dust, a silver powder. The wind and the heat lent them the strangest, most unexpected forms, and it was frightening, the way that they would appear, only to disappear once more, like ghosts, as if they were playing a stony hide and seek. But the fragments of stone underfoot grew, and suddenly the gravel came to an end, and once again I could hear the clay under my feet. | Entry #22208 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Britishbritish
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danced and undulated | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
did it explain how there had come to be such an enormous amount of dust | Other Fronting is an exceptionally good choice to translate this part of the sentence! | Irina Smirnova No agrees/disagrees | |
Somewhere, a long way back | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
blunt perseverance | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
before simply rolling in a billowing wave | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
twirling and jumping like a japing jester | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 1 The wind and the heat lent them the strangest, most unexpected forms | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin | |
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my feet, | Inconsistencies All the parts of the body require a person they belong to; however, from this extract it remains unclear if it is "I/my" soles and "my" shadow respectively. | Irina Smirnova No agrees/disagrees | |
-2 +1 2 filling the blackness and then positively monstrous | Inconsistencies | Nadezhda Golubeva | |
+2 1 was at my back. | Other Incorrect assumption of 1st person perspective; repetition. | Natalia Nikitin | |
my back, my hair; brutal, it lashed the back of my neck, damp with sweat; it whipped my arms, my ears, it filled my pockets, it grabbed me by the scruff of my neck... | Mistranslations Why "my"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
it grabbed me by the scruff of my neck | Mistranslations | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
The wind and the heat lent them the strangest, most unexpected forms | Other The wind and the heat LENT THEM THE STRANGEST,” - definitely sounds odd, does not flow well. | movcharov No agrees/disagrees | |
they would appear, only to disappear once more, | Other a synonym should be used, instead of ‘appear - disappear’ , in such a close proximity. | movcharov No agrees/disagrees | |
a stony hide and seek | MistranslationsShould have been “of rocks”, or “of stones”. Instead, incorrect word used: “a stony”, means covered with small pebbles, little rocks -Link: Dictionary online: pebbly, gravelly, shingly; rough, hard. ANTONYMS smooth. 2 a stony stare: unfriendly, hostile, cold, chilly, frosty, icy; hard, flinty, steely, stern, | movcharov No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was overhead. Copper from dust, the disk hung in the center of the whitish, obscured sky; a mongrel shadow wiggled and puckered from under my very soles, now gray and fuzzy, now suddenly as if alive, taking on sharpness of outlines, filling with darkness and then especially horrid. No road here, hadn't been as long as anyone remembered: there was lumpy dry gray-yellow clay, full of cracks, dead, hard, like stone, and so naked that it was absolutely unclear where all this dust was coming from. The wind, thank God, was blowing at my back. Somewhere far-off behind me it sucked in the incalculable tons of heinous torrid powder and with blunt tenacity swept it along the sun-burnt ledge, pinched between the gulf and the Yellow wall, now sending it in a spinning protuberance all the way up to the sky, now twisting it tightly into flexible, almost flirtatious, swan-neck dust whirls, now simply rolling it in a billowing shaft and then, suddenly gone berzerk, flinging spiky flour at my back, in my hair, lashing, maniacally beating the sweaty back of my head, whipping my arms, my ears, filling my pockets, getting down my collar... Nothing was here, not for a long time. Perhaps there never had been anything. Sun, clay, wind. Only once in a while I'd come by the prickly skeleton of a bush, flailing and jumping about as if making funny faces like a wandering showman, torn out by the roots somewhere, God knows where behind me. Not a drop of water, no signs of life. And only dust, dust, dust, dust... From time to time the clay under my feet disappeared, and solid rocky chunks began. Everything here was scorching, like in hell. Giant pieces of rubble from the cliffs began to peek out, either from the right or the left, from the clouds of onrushing dust, gray as if powdered with flour. The wind and the heat attached to them the strangest, most unexpected forms, and it was scary to see them appear and again disappear, like ghosts, as if playing at their game of stone hide-and-seek. Meanwhile the gravel under foot was becoming larger and larger, and suddenly the scattering ended and again clay rang under foot. | Entry #22114 — Discuss 0 — Variant: USuseng
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+1 absolutely unclear where all this dust was coming from | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin | |
+1 Somewhere far-off behind me it sucked in the incalculable tons of heinous torrid powder and with blunt tenacity swept it along the sun-burnt ledge, | Flows well The whole sentence is a job well done! | Valentina Kozyreva | |
maniacally beating the sweaty back of my head | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
making funny faces like a wandering showman | Good term selection | Valentina Kozyreva No agrees/disagrees | |
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my | Mistranslations Where does the original text says if the backs were "our" or "your" or "my" or "her"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
my | Mistranslations Why "my"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was at its zenith. The disk, copper-like from dust, hung in the center of a dirty-white sky. Your ugly shadow squirmed and bulged under your feet, gray and fuzzy. Then, unexpectedly, as if coming to life, its contours filled with blackness and it became even more ugly. There had never been a road here, only small hills of gray-yellow, dry clay—cracked, dead, rock-hard; an area so huge and barren that it was incomprehensible how it came to be. Luckily, the wind was at your back. Somewhere, behind you, it picked up tons of disgusting, burning hot dust particles and carried them with a dogged perseverance along the sun-scorched ridge, which was squeezed between the abyss and the Yellow Wall. Sometimes the wind spun the particles into dust devils; sometimes it twisted it into the shape of coquettish swan necks. Or it simply rolled the dust until it curled into a huge ball of sharp-edged flour, which it would angrily hurl at your back, covering your hair and then, seemingly furious, whipped your sweaty nape, pounded your hands and ears, filled your pockets, and seeped under your collar. Nothing existed here. Nothing had existed here for a long time. Perhaps, never. Only the sun, the dusty clay, and the wind. Occasionally a thorny skeleton of a bush, roots still attached, came out from God knows where and raced by—spinning and jumping like a grimacing skomorokh. Not a drop of water, no signs of any life. Only dust, dust, dust, dust… From time to time the clay disappeared under your feet, replaced by a continuous crushed stone mass. Here everything was burning hellishly hot. Giant fragments of cliffs began to appear right and left through the clouds of rushing grey powdery dust. The wind and the heat gave them bizarre and unexpected shapes, and it was frightening that they appeared and disappeared like ghosts playing hide and seek. The crushed stones underfoot became larger and larger; and then suddenly the stony accumulation was gone, and the clay again rang beneath your feet. | Entry #22160 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Not specifiednone
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-1 1 Your ugly shadow squirmed and bulged under your feet, gray and fuzzy | Flows well "your" conveys the meaning and implication of the phrase in the Russian text, i.e. this place makes a human being feel ugly and bad | Ekaterina Vashurina | |
gray-yellow, dry clay—cracked, dead, rock-hard | Flows well | Natalia Nikitin No agrees/disagrees | |
sometimes it twisted it into the shape of coquettish swan necks | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
-2 2 skomorokh | Good term selection transliteration or transliterated borrowing from Russian sounds really well and conveys the spirit of the prose | Ekaterina Vashurina | |
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-1 +3 2 how it came to be | Mistranslations The sentence is talking about the dust, not the whole area. | Sofia Gutkin | |
your | Mistranslations Where does the original text says if the backs were "our" or "your" or "mine"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
until it curled into a huge ball of sharp-edged flour, which it would angrily hurl at your back | Mistranslations The wind wasn't throwing the ball of dust at their backs. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was at its zenith. The disk covered in copper dust was hanging in the center of the pale, dirty sky, a beastly shadow writhed and bristled under the very feet, being at the same time gray and blurred, and then as though suddenly coming to life, it showed sharp outlines and absorbed darkness which then made it look especially ugly. Nobody recalls that there has ever been a road, in fact it was bumpy, grey-yellow, dry clay that looked like cracked, worn, hard stone being so bare that it was impossible to understand what generated so much dust. Thank goodness, the wind blew in our favor. Somewhere far behind it was sucking in countless tons of vicious white-hot stone granules and dragged them with plain persistence along the sun-scorched ridge sandwiched between the abyss and the Yellow wall, now ejecting them like a spinning protuberance up to the very sky, now twisting them right into tight, flexible, almost playful tornadoes with swan-like necks, now rolling them as a swirling drum, and then, suddenly getting furious, the wind hurled prickly powder against our backs, and into our hair, going berserk it whipped the back of our necks where sweat was pouring down, whipped our arms, ears, filled our pockets, spilt behind the collar… There has been nothing here, just nothing for a long time. And maybe, never been. The sun, clay, wind. Sometimes it was only a thorny skeleton of a bush uprooted in the middle of nowhere behind rushing by as a spinning, bouncing, grimacing buffoon. Not a drop of water and no signs of life. Only dust, just dust, nothing but dust... Occasionally the clay underfoot would disappear somewhere and solid mass of crushed gravel would appear instead. Everything here was white-hot as though in hell. Now on the right, then on the left some huge fragments of cliffs – gray, as if powdered with flour, peered out of the clouds of rushing dust. The wind and heat turned them into the most bizarre and unsuspected shapes, and it was scary that now they would just so appear and then would disappear again as ghosts, as if playing hide-and-seek with cliffs. But the gravel underfoot would become larger, and suddenly the gravel-strewn ground would end and clay would sing again under our feet. | Entry #19025 — Discuss 0 — Variant: USuseng
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hard stone being so bare that it was impossible to understand what generated so much dust. | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
our | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
+2 sandwiched between the abyss and the Yellow wall | Flows well | K2tona | |
our backs | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
going berserk | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
Only dust, just dust, nothing but dust... | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 now they would just so appear and then would disappear again as ghosts, as if | Flows well | K2tona | |
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-1 +1 2 covered in | Grammar errors be covered with | K2tona | |
-1 +1 1 beastly shadow writhed and bristled | Inconsistencies a beastly shadow of what? | K2tona | |
+2 1 recalls that there has ever been a road | Grammar errors wrong tense | K2tona | |
+1 1 blew in our favor | Other The work seems to be written in 3rd person perspective. | Natalia Nikitin | |
our | Mistranslations Where does the original text says if the backs were "our" or "your" or "my" or "her"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
| Mistranslations Granules are larger than particles of russian "пороша". | K2tona | |
| Inconsistencies Tense confusion with the previous verb in the sentence. | Sofia Gutkin | |
our backs, and into our hair, going berserk it whipped the back of our necks where sweat was pouring down, whipped our arms, ears, filled our | Mistranslations Why "our"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
has been | Grammar errors wrong tense | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
just nothing for a long time | Syntax Doesn't sound like proper English | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
| Syntax Has been or had been. It can't just be 'been'. | Sofia Gutkin | |
sun, clay, wind | Syntax There must be an 'and' in English before wind. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
behind | Syntax Behind what or where? | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
| Grammar errors Like, not 'as' is used in similes | K2tona | |
+1 solid mass of crushed gravel | Inconsistencies how can a solid mass be particles at the same time | K2tona | |
unsuspected shapes | Mistranslations You either say 'unexpected' or 'unsuspecting'. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
with cliffs | Mistranslations This makes it sound like the cliffs are playing hide-n-seek with the cliffs. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
| It was high noon. The sun’s copper plate shone through dust interposed on a nominally white, grimy sky. A bastardly shadow writhed and squirmed, the angle of the projection falling below that of the shadow’s own feet. It alternated between a blurry gray and an outline that snapped into focus, filling with blackness and thus becoming uglier still. The hand of man had not laid roads or anything else here. Here was lumpy dry clay, gray and yellow, cracked and killed and hard as stone, so bare that one could not fathom where such a great mass of dust could have come from. A wind was blowing from behind, thank goodness. Somewhere far back it had inhaled countless tons of scorched and revolting powder, which with resolute stubbornness the wind proceeded to ferry along the sunburnt ledge, squeezed in between the precipice and the Yellow Wall. Particulate was ejected as whirling flares that hit the sky, and then cinched in the intricate, almost flirtatious swans' necks of tornados. It was rolled as puffs, and then a moment later let loose entirely as it inflicted prickling torment on backs and hair, thrashing with wild fury at a sweat-drenched neck, lashing hands and ears, filling pockets, and slipping down a collar... There was nothing here. There had been nothing here for a very long time, or perhaps ever. Sun and clay and wind. Now and again the prickly skeleton of a shrub might blow through, topsy-turvy and prancing like a country dancer, its roots ripped up an impossibly far distance ago. Not a drop of water. Not a sign of life. Just dust upon dust upon dust. Sometimes the clay would disappear beneath their feet entirely, giving way to crumbled stone. A truly hellish, scorched landscape. Immense fallen boulders – gray, as if powdered by flour – started to peek out left and right from behind the puffs of rollicking dust. The wind and heat impressed the most strange and unexpected outlines upon these giants, which terrified with their habit of appearing and then vanishing like apparitions the next moment, as if playing geological hide-and-seek. Meanwhile the gravel beneath the travelers’ feet became larger, the bits becoming bigger and then non-existent, as clay rang again underfoot. | Entry #22205 — Discuss 0 — Variant: USuseng
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It was high noon. | Flows well Thank you for no zeniths here. | Valentina Kozyreva No agrees/disagrees | |
The hand of man had not laid roads or anything else here | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
gray and yellow, cracked and killed and hard as stone | Flows well | Valentina Kozyreva No agrees/disagrees | |
fathom where such a great mass of dust could have come from. | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
rolled as puffs, and then a moment later let loose entirely | Flows well | Valentina Kozyreva No agrees/disagrees | |
Now and again the prickly skeleton of a shrub might blow through, topsy-turvy and prancing like a country dancer | Flows well | Valentina Kozyreva No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 Just dust upon dust upon dust | Flows well | K2tona | |
Sometimes the clay would disappear beneath their feet entirely | Flows well | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
started to peek out left and right from behind the puffs of rollicking dust | Flows well | Valentina Kozyreva No agrees/disagrees | |
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It was high noon | Mistranslations Inaccurate translation. | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 +1 interposed on a nominally | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
nominally | Other what does "nominally white" mean? | Sarah McDowell No agrees/disagrees | |
+2 the angle of the projection | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
-1 +2 2 falling below that of the shadow’s own feet | Mistranslations It is not the shadow's feet, it is the people's feet | Sofia Gutkin | |
+1 1 and killed and hard | Syntax | K2tona | |
+2 1 which with resolute stubbornness the wind | Syntax | K2tona | |
Particulate | Inconsistencies | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
-2 2 swans' necks | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
+1 1 backs and hair, thrashing with wild fury at a sweat-drenched neck, lashing hands and ears, filling pockets, and slipping down a collar... | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
far distance ago | Mistranslations | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
| Inconsistencies wrong connotation | K2tona | |
-1 1 which terrified with their habit of appearing and then vanishing like apparitions | Syntax | K2tona | |
+1 the bits becoming bigger and then non-existent | Other Clumsy choice of words | Sofia Gutkin | |
| The sun was at its peak. Its disk, brass behind the dust, was hanging right in the middle of sordid white, unclear sky; the bustard of a shadow was squirming and bristling from under my soles, now vague and grayish, now – alive with its outlines getting sharp and swelling with darkness and then - especially ugly. There was not a sign of a road here – only a tuberous field of grayish-yellow, dry clay, chapped and worn, hard as rocks and so empty that it was a complete mystery how it could produce such a mass of dust. The wind, praise be, was blowing from behind. Back there, it engulfed uncountable flows of foul scorching blizzard and stubbornly dragged it along the ledge, burned by the sun and squeezed in between the abyss and the Yellow Wall; at times it egested whirling protuberances into the sky or gallanted the swan necks of tornadoes, tight and flexible, sometimes it would simply bowl along the curling roller of dust and then, suddenly enraged, would hurl this spiny meal powder at our backs, heads and hair, getting brutal it would lash our dump sweaty napes, whip our hands and ears, stuff our pockets, and pour it into our collars… There was nothing here, had been so for a long time. Maybe, forever. Sun, clay and wind. Rarely would appear a thorny skeleton of a bush, torn out by the roots God knows where behind: it would rush by, whirling and leaping like an aping buffoon. And nothing: not a drop of water, not a sign of life. Only dust, dust, dust, dust… At times the clay under one’s feet would disappear and give way to some utter hash of stones and rocks. It was red-hot like in Hell. Here and there in the rushing clouds of dust giant cliffs would show – grayish-white as if powdered with flour. Wind and heat would give them the most incredible shapes, and it was terrifying seeing them like that, showing and vanishing like ghosts, playing their own hide-and-seek. Meanwhile the crushed stones would get bigger and bigger till they run out abruptly under one’s feet as they hit the clinking clay again. | Entry #22226 — Discuss 0 — Variant: USuseng
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+3 1 Its disk, brass behind the dust, | Flows well | K2tona | |
it was a complete mystery how it could produce such a mass of dust. | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
engulfed uncountable flows of foul | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
into the sky or gallanted the swan necks of tornadoes, tight and flexible | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
aping buffoon | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
utter hash of stones and rocks | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
it was terrifying seeing them like that | Flows well | Nadezhda Golubeva No agrees/disagrees | |
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+2 There was not a sign of a road | Syntax Not ideal phrasing. 'There was no sign of a road..' - better. | Natalia Nikitin | |
chapped | Mistranslations Nice idea but the term is always used for lips or skin | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
praise be | Syntax not native English, at least not standard dialect | Elizabeth Kulikov No agrees/disagrees | |
uncountable flows | Mistranslations | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 1 blizzard | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
getting brutal it would lash | Syntax Doesn't flow with the rest of the sentence | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
had been so | Syntax In this case since the first clause is negative, you should say "hadn't been" to match it. | Elizabeth Kulikov No agrees/disagrees | |
till they run out | Syntax Wrong tense | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 1 one’s | Mistranslations l like "our" better. It gives 1st person experience connotation. | K2tona | |
| The sun was in its zenith. A disk, copper in color from all the dust, was hanging in the middle of the whitish, fuzzy sky. Its appalling shadow was making faces, staring from underneath my feet: at times in a grayish, washed-down form, then virtually revving and regaining the sharpness of its contours, then swelling with blackness and becoming even more ugly. There was no road there, or in the vicinity. There was only some porous, grayish-yellow dry clay, all cracked, hard-trodden and hard as a stone. In addition, it was naked, making it a total mystery where such an amount of dust that had collected there had come from. The wind, thank God, was blowing in my back. Somewhere far behind, it was sucking up uncountable tons of repulsive hot dust, and with dumb stubbornness dragging it down the sun-burnt protrusion between the chasm and the Yellow wall, either ejecting it up into the sky in a big perturbance, or again twisting it tightly into flexible, almost coquet-like, swan necks of tornadoes. Or, it I was swarming as a gusting roll, roaring and throwing piercing particles of flour at my sweaty back and into my hair, pounding like a wild animal against the back of my neck, hitting my hands and ears, filling the pockets with dust , and throwing dust behind my collar. There wasn't anything there. Nothing had been been there for a long time, and maybe ever. The sun, clay and the wind. Only sporadically, grimacing like a clown, a thorny skeleton of some bush would hang in the air, jumping: one which had been torn out with its roots, only God knows where, somewhere far behind . Not a drop of water. No sign of life. And, only the dust, dust, dust, dust… From time to time, the clay underneath my feet would disappear somewhere, and a land covered entirely with stones would start. Everything there was hot like in Hell. From left and right, taking turns, gigantic clouds of stones kept emerging from behind the balls of the travelling dust , gray, as if sprinkled with flour. The wind and the heat were giving them the most frightening and unexpected features. It was scary that they were appearing out of nowhere, and then suddenly disappearing like phantoms, literally playing hide and seek with one another. Then, the gavel underneath my feet started getting bigger and bigger to suddenly disappear. And, clay resounded underneath my feet. | Entry #20044 — Discuss 0 — Variant: USuseng
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twisting it tightly into flexible, almost coquet-like, swan necks of tornadoes. | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
Nothing had been been there for a long time, and maybe ever | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
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-1 1 fuzzy sky | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
then virtually revving and regaining the sharpness of its contours, then swelling | Mistranslations | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 1 hard-trodden and hard as a stone. | Mistranslations repetition | K2tona | |
my | Mistranslations Where does the original text says if the backs were "our" or "your" or "my" or "her"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 +1 2 hang in the air | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
+2 2 clouds of stones | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
-2 2 literally playing hide and seek | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
d, | Grammar errors comma should not be there | Natalia Nikitin No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was at its highest — a bronze disc of dust suspended in the centre of a grubby whitish sky, a mongrel shadow writhing and bristling even at its underbelly, one moment grey and washed-out, the next moment as it were reinvigorated, taking on a well-defined silhouette filled in by blackness, and the next instant greatly distorted. There was no track of any description here; there was bumpy yellowish-grey dry clay — cracked, done to death, rock-hard, and, what’s more, bare, which made it hard to work out where all this mass of dust had been carried here from. At least the wind was at your back. Somewhere far behind, it had sucked in countless tons of nasty scalding freshly-minted dust and had with obtuse perseverance dragged it along a sun-scorched excrescence wedged between the crevice and the yellow wall: one moment casting up its twisting protuberance to the very heavens, the next coiling tightly into lissom, almost coquettish, swan’s-necks of whirlwind, then simply rolling along in an inflated spindle, and then, suddenly seized with a passion, flinging its smarting flour into backs, into hair; it lashed frenziedly at the sweat-soaked nape of the neck, pecked at hands and ears, filled pockets, dripped off the shoulders … There was nothing here; it had been a long while since anything had been. Perhaps there never had. Sun; clay; wind. Only occasionally was it picked up, twirling and bouncing like a gurning buffoon, a stinging skeleton of scrub torn out by the roots God knows how far back. Not a drop of water, no signs of life; just dust, dust, dust, dust … From time to time, the clay at your feet would fall away and a rocky melange would reveal itself. Here, all was incandescent as hell. First from the right, then from the left, there began to peek out from the wisps of carrying dust enormous splinters of rock face — grey, as if dusted with flour. The wind and heat lent them the oddest, most unexpected profiles, and it was terrifying that they revealed themselves as they did: by turn appearing and receding from view again, like spectres playing at their rocky hide-and-seek. But then the gravel beneath you would become increasingly massy, and suddenly the sediment resumed and clay once again crunched underfoot. | Entry #22184 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Britishbritish
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-2 2 done to death | Flows well | K2tona | |
mass of dust had been carried here from. | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
casting up its twisting protuberance to the very heavens | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
by turn appearing and receding | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
clay once again crunched underfoot. | Flows well creative but i like it | Elizabeth Kulikov No agrees/disagrees | |
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-1 +2 2 a bronze disc of dust | Mistranslations was it a disk made of dust? | K2tona | |
-1 1 a mongrel shadow | Syntax | K2tona | |
+1 , and the next instant greatly distorted. | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
freshly-minted dust | Mistranslations | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
-2 2 swan’s- | Mistranslations these swans are not alive, therefore, the apostrophe is not appropriate | K2tona | |
-1 +1 2 backs, into hair | Grammar errors as someone corrected me and I agreed, these should be ones' necks and backs | K2tona | |
pecked at hands and ears, filled pockets, dripped off the shoulders … | Grammar errors | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 +1 2 Sun; clay; wind | Punctuation | K2tona | |
+1 it picked up, twirling and bouncing like a gurning buffoon, a stinging skeleton of scrub torn out | Syntax | K2tona | |
-1 1 there began to peek out from the wisps of carrying dust | Other Clearly not native English | Sofia Gutkin | |
profiles | Mistranslations | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
beneath you | Mistranslations Beneath your feet | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
sediment | Mistranslations | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was at its zenith. Brazed with dust limb was staying at the center of the albescent, impure sky. Under the feet, twisted and bristled a bastard shadow, pale and blurry, suddenly turned to be alive and steeply contoured, getting black and extra ugly thereby. No one has ever heard of any roadway here: it was just the oatmeal, dry and hummocky clay soil, chapped, dead, as rigid as a stone, and so naked that it made us wonder where all that dust came from. Thank goodness, the wind was at our backs, and far behind it swallowed up those enormous tons of curst and hot dust, dragged it with its stubborn bluntness along the sun-burnt brow squeezed between the lin and the Yellow Wall, threw it as a twirling protuberance into the sky or tightly twisted it into wiry, almost cutesy, swan-necked whirls. At times, it just rolled them as a cloudy curl, and then, with sudden rage, the wind hurled this biting powder at our backs and hair, furiously beat our sweating napes, arms and ears, filled our collars and pockets with dust. There wasn’t anything there, had not been for a long time. Never, perhaps. Just the sun, the clay and the wind. But occasionally, by passed a thorny skeleton of bush, rolling and bouncing like a traveling minstrel, having been pulled out from the ground god knows where behind. No drop of water, no sign of life. Just dust and dust, and dust… Now and then, the clay under our feet got changed into continuous stony crumbs. Everything was red-hot as in Hell. On our right or left, through clouds of dust rushing by, arose rocks, huge and hoary, as if they were poured with flour. The wind and the sun gave them their odd and unexpected shapes, and we were scared by their sudden uprising and disappearing as if those rocky ghosts were playing hide-and seek game. The cobble under our feet was getting coarser and then, all of a sudden, the gravel came to the end, giving up its turn to that clinking clay again. | Entry #22183 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Britishbritish
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furiously beat our sweating napes | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
then, all of a sudden, the gravel came to the end, giving up its turn to that clinking clay again. | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
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turned to be alive | Mistranslations I don't even know what that's supposed to mean | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
has ever heard | Grammar errors | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
naked | Mistranslations | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
our | Mistranslations Where does the original text mentions if the backs were "our" or "mine"? | kideko No agrees/disagrees | |
those | Syntax Unnecessary term here. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
curst | Mistranslations | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
lin | Mistranslations | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
cloudy curl | Mistranslations 'Curl' makes me think of hair | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
-1 1 minstrel, | Mistranslations | K2tona | |
d seek | Spelling | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was high. From the zenith of a filthy whitish sky, the hanging disk looking copper because of dust cast loathsome shadows that writhed and warped under very soles. Sometimes, the penumbra was gray and blurry, but sometimes, as if precipitously revived, it became sharp-contoured, filled with blackness and therefore especially ugly. There was no sign of a road but bumpy, gray-and-yellow dry clay so cracked, dead and hard like stone, that it was absolutely unclear where all this plethora of dust comes from. Thanks God, the wind blew into the back. Somewhere behind, it sucked innumerable tones of the foully scorched powder and with dumb determination trailed it along a torrid ledge stuck between a precipice and the Yellow Wall. The gusts tightly twisted the powder into lissome, almost coquette swan necks of whirlwinds sending them right into the sky. Ofttimes the gusts just simply rolled the dust like a swirling billow but all of the sudden running wild, the wind tossed the prickly starch into the back and hair, brutally whipping the nape of the neck drenched with sweat, snatching the hands and ears, stuffing the pockets, pouring under the collar… Nothing was here, long ago nothing was here; and maybe never. There was only the sun, clay and wind. Sometimes just a bristly bush skeleton uprooted God alone knows where swept by twirling and tumbling, like a quivering buffoon. Not a single drop of water. No trace of life. Dust, dust and only the dust… From time to time, the clay underfoot disappeared and then downright stone hash bust out. Everything was burning hot, like in hell. Here and there, out of the clouds of surging up dust, some grizzly gigantic splinters of crags seeming as if they had been sprinkled with flour came into view. The heat and wind gave them weird and unexpected outlines and it was scary that they just emerged and vanished this way, like ghosts playing hide-and-seek. Meanwhile the gravel underfoot was getting bigger but suddenly the terrain changed and again the marl clanked beneath. | Entry #19946 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Not specifiednone
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From the zenith of a filthy whitish sky | Good term selection Incorporates the word zenith from the original in a more or less "English" stlye. | Ligia Costa No agrees/disagrees | |
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| Grammar errors a classic mistake made by a native speaker of Russian - it needs an article. | Ligia Costa | |
-1 +1 1 penumbra | Mistranslations technically correct English, but a word with very scientific connotation. Does not fit the text. | Ligia Costa | |
-1 1 precipitously | Other This is classic "thesaurus" English. | Ligia Costa | |
-2 +1 2 dead | Mistranslations Clay cannot be alive. Try for another definition of убитая. | Ligia Costa | |
+1 the wind blew into the back | Grammar errors The back of what? There has to be a word following it in English | Sofia Gutkin | |
+1 downright stone hash bust out | Other Doesn't make any sense. | Sofia Gutkin | |
| Sun stood in zenith. Disk, redded by dust, hung in the center of whitish, foul sky, waning shadow writhed and bristled at the very feet, sometimes gray and blurry, sometimes almost coming alive, gaining sharp edge, filled with blackness and particular ugliness. There was not even a notion of a road – only bumpy grayish yellow dry clay, cracked, dead, hard as stone and so bare it made one wonder, where all this dust came from. Thank goodness, wind blew from behind. Somewhere far it sucked in countless tons of nasty scorching powder and dragged it with apathetic stubborness along the ledge burnt with the sun, squeezing among the abyss and the Yellow wall, throwing it up in protuberance sometimes, then twisting into supple, almost fetching swan-like necks of tornadoes, or rolled it in a curling wave and then, infuriated, threw biting dust flour against backs, into the hair, slashed, running amok, sweaty soaked back of the neck and head, whipped hands, ears, stuffed the dust into pockets, poured it behind the collar... Not a thing, for a long, long time. And, perhaps, there never was a thing. Sun, clay and wind. Rarely a thorny skeleton of a bush ripped who knows how far behind with its root rushed along, twisting, hopping, a bouncing joker. Not a droplet of water, no signs of life. And dust, dust, only dust and nothing but dust. Sometimes clay under feet ended and they trode on sheer stone medley. Hellish heat then surrounded them. To the right, to the left gigantic rock fragments could be seen among the waves of boiling dust, grey, as if powdered with flour. Wind and heat turned they contours into weird and startling shapes, spooky they were, emerging and disappearing again, like ghosts, like stone giants playing some kind of hide-and-seek game. And crushed rocks beneath became bigger and bigger and then metalling was over and clay rang once again with their steps. | Entry #22118 — Discuss 0 — Variant: USuseng
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and so bare it made one wonder, where all this dust came from. | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
into supple, | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
metalling was over | Flows well | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
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Sun | Grammar errors | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
Disk, | Grammar errors | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
redded by dust | Spelling Reddened perhaps? | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
foul sky, waning shadow | Syntax | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
wind | Grammar errors | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
far | Grammar errors | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
among | Grammar errors | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
throwing it up in protuberance sometimes | Other Awkward sentence structure | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
backs, into the hair, slashed, running amok, sweaty soaked back of the neck and head, whipped hands, ears, stuffed the dust into pockets, poured it behind the collar. | Grammar errors should be our necks, or my neck. | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
there never was a thing | Other Not native English | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
ripped who knows how far behind with its root rushed along | Syntax | K2tona No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 Sometimes clay under feet ended | Grammar errors Missing "the", missing "their" | Sofia Gutkin | |
To the right, to the left | Syntax Either 'to the right and left' or 'to the right and to the left' | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
like ghosts, like stone giants | Other Strange and awkward repetition. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 1 metalling | Grammar errors | K2tona | |
| The sun was in zenith. The sun disk, copper from dust, hung in the middle of the albescent, dirty sky. Bastardly shadow (sometimes being grey and blurred, sometimes becoming alive and sharp, ripening with blackness and, then, especially ugly) writhed and bristled under the very soles. There was no road at all here. There was bumpy yellow-grey dry clay chapped, crushed, hard as flint, and so bare that it was completely unclear how such a mass of dust appeared here. The wind, thanks God, blew in the back. Somewhere far away behind it sucked down countless tons of rotten scorching newly fallen dust and with dull stubbornness dragged the dust along the burnt by the sun jut squeezed between the abyss and Yellow wall by throwing it as a swirling protuberance up to the sky, by twisting toughly in supple, almost coquettish swan necks of tornadoes, by simply rolling as a curling billow, and then suddenly going wild tossed prickly flour in backs, hair, getting furious lashed on nape, whipping on hands, ears, getting into pockets and under the collar. Nothing was here; there was nothing here for a long time already. And maybe there had never been anything before. The sun, clay, wind. Only sometimes a prickly skeleton of a bush pulled out with the roots in some God-forgotten place behind would gallop swirling and leaping as a wriggling clown. Not even a drop of water, no signs of life. And only dust, dust, dust, dust... From time to time the clay under feet disappeared somewhere and continuous stone medley began. Everything was as scorching here as in hell. First, from the right, then, from the left grey (as if dusted with flour) giant rock pieces began to become clear in the clouds of racing dust. Wind and heat gave them the strangest and most unexpected outlines, and it scared that they appeared and then again disappeared as ghosts as if playing in stony hide-and-sick. And crushed stone under feet became bigger and suddenly the scattered stone ended and clay rang under feet again. | Entry #22123 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Not specifiednone
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ripening with blackness | Good term selection | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
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bumpy yellow-grey dry clay chapped | Syntax You can't just rattle off a whole bunch of adjectives in English | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
blew in the back | Grammar errors It's not blew IN the back - it's "blew at our back/from behind" | Sarah McDowell No agrees/disagrees | |
down | Mistranslations Sucked up? | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 rotten scorching newly fallen | Syntax Mistranslation - rotten doesn't fit here, and once again, the adjectives are just listed here. | Sofia Gutkin | |
burnt by the sun jut squeezed between the abyss and Yellow wall | Syntax Commas are your friends! | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
then suddenly going wild tossed prickly flour | Syntax Verb confusion. It's a mess with no commas | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
in backs, hair | Grammar errors At our backs? Against our backs? Into our backs? | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
was nothing here for a long time already | Grammar errors wrong tense - there had been nothing here for a long time | Cristina Palmer No agrees/disagrees | |
behind | Grammar errors Behind who? This doesn't sound right in English | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
under feet | Mistranslations underfoot | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
| The sun was at the Zenith. Copper dust disk hung in the center of a pale, dirty sky, who watches the shadow writhed and puffed up under the soles, the grey and blurry, then suddenly seemed to come alive, to take the sharpness of contours, getting drunk black and then especially ugly. No roads here and there was no trace -- was uneven gray-yellow dry clay, cracked, broken, hard as stone, and until that is naked, that it is not clear was how it takes such a lot of dust. The wind, thank God, blew in her back. Somewhere far behind he sucked in the countless tons infamous hot porosi and stupid stubbornness, dragging her along the sun-scorched lip locked between the Gulf and the Yellow wall, throwing her spinning prominence to the sky, then rolled tight in a flexible, almost flirtatious, Swan neck tornadoes, then just rolled Curling shaft, and then, suddenly osterone, threw barbed flour in the back, in the hair, whipping, swerea, sweaty neck, was flogged on his hands, ears, stuffed their pockets, poured by the collar... Nothing here was not that long ago there was nothing. And can be, and never. The sun, earth, wind. Only sometimes sweep, bumping and jumping grimacing a buffoon, barbed skeleton Bush had been torn up by the roots God knows where behind. A single drop of water, no signs of life. And only dust, dust, dust, dust... From time to time clay under my feet vanished somewhere, and began solid stone crumbs. Everything here was raskalennoj as hell. Then right, then left began to look out of the clubs rushing dust giant rocks - gray, like powdered with flour. The wind and the heat made them the most strange and unexpected shapes, and was afraid that they wouldn appear, then disappear again, as ghosts, as if playing with their stone-and-seek. And crushed under his feet grew larger, and suddenly scattering ended, and again under the feet rang clay. | Entry #19928 — Discuss 0 — Variant: Not specifiednone
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Zenith | Spelling No need to capitalise the word. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
Copper dust disk | Omission Three nouns in a row - what are you aiming for here? | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
who watches | Mistranslations I don't even know where that came from. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 1 No roads here and there was no trace | Syntax wrong word order. As a variant "There was no trace of a road here or there" | Ekaterina Vashurina | |
until that is naked | Mistranslations Also terrible English. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+2 2 her | Mistranslations ok, where was the woman | K2tona | |
he | Mistranslations The wind is male, is it? | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
infamous hot | Mistranslations More terrible English! | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
her | Mistranslations The mysterious woman appears again. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
her | Inconsistencies The doer is unclear, so we cannot use a possessive pronoun without understanding who the doer really is. | Irina Smirnova No agrees/disagrees | |
Swan | Spelling Why is "Swan" written with the capital here? | Ekaterina Vashurina No agrees/disagrees | |
Curling shaft | Mistranslations Even Google Translate isn't this bad. | Sofia Gutkin No agrees/disagrees | |
+1 1 Nothing here was not that long ago there was nothing. And can be, and never. | Syntax Doesn't make sense | Elizabeth Kulikov | |
+1 1 A single drop of water, no signs of life. | Mistranslations No single drop of water... | Ekaterina Vashurina | |
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